“I got 99 problems I feel bad for ya son.”
My favorite song. 99 problems.
“Yo Dwayne, pass me a coke”, Anthony said.
As I hand him the coke, we hear a bang. My ears were ringing so loud, I couldn’t hear myself think. As we looked out Anthony’s window we couldn’t hear or see anything. Looking down the block, I saw these dudes with bandanas covering their face. They were running. Me and Anthony looked at each other and back out the window. We could hear sirens. We then heard a scream. Me and Anthony sprinted downstairs so fast, our track coach would do anything to have us on the team. So we were downstairs. Locking every door and closing ever shades we saw. We both knew what was happening. And we were prepared for anything.
20 minutes past. We both go out the back door and run to the ambulance. I get there, and I see this lady crying her eyes out. Her makeup was streaming down her face.
“Please Lord…save my son”
She takes her right hand of his stomach and her hand is pure red. As blood gushes out of his stomach, she puts her hand back on the wound. Her left hand is supporting his head from the concrete. I start to cry, the lady knew he was going to die, but prayed and prayed. He started to breath harder, his lips were turning pale and his shirt was covered in blood.
Tears were rolling down Anthony’s face. He grabbed the lady’s arm and tried to say something but I couldn’t understand. The doctors tried to stop the bleeding, but within moments..he stopped breathing. He was dead.
I closed my eyes and opened them. I was thinking, this really happened. Someone just died right in front of me.
Me and Anthony ran back to my house.
I felt this, cold feeling inside me. It started to ache. The ache turned into pain. I feel like I felt the pain he was feeling. It seemed like as he was dying, I could hear him say, “Please do something!”.
“Anthony…please go home”.
He left without saying anything. I think he felt it to.
I get home and my mom was sobbing, lying down on the kitchen floor.
“Your brothers dead..”
(TO BE CONTINUED)
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NICE JOB RAY! GREAT STORY! its kinda spooky:) I cant wait until the second part! im anxious to read it!
ReplyDeleteI think it was a good story, but I don't understand what happened. Some guys ran down the street and someone got killed?
ReplyDeleteIt's always difficult to write from the point of view of a character whose life is so drasticallly different from your own. You've done well with the details.
ReplyDeleteThis is a excellent story Ray. I love how you left the story as a cliff hanger and it is to be resumed at a different time. Love the story man!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteThat was a sad story haha but it was really good
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